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Proper wording for "A friend of a friend"...

mjfw

Dear Archinectors,

I will be beginning an internship work term in January lasting for 8 months until the end of August (I am currently in my final semester of 3rd year) and will be beginning the application process soon.

I have made contact with a "friend of a friend" who worked for a very large office that I am extremely interested in working for. I contacted someone I use to work with saying I was interested in working for this office, so he then contacted a friend of his who has worked there and asked if he could perhaps be of any assistance to me in obtaining an internship.

I just received a response from him this morning giving me detailed instructions of who to contact, when to call, and how to refine my portfolio to help be a preferred candidate in their internship selection process. He also said that because I come so highly recommended from the friend of his (the person who I use to work with and who I contacted) that I can use his name in I guess my cover letter and when I contact the office by telephone.

What I am wondering though, is how to go about wording it my cover letter and on the telephone. Something a little more elegant than: "yea, I know this guy who knows this guy that use to work for your office. Wanna hire me???". Perhaps someone has some suggestions for a more formal and appropriate way of wording it which might help.

Thanks.

 
Oct 5, 10 8:56 am

"Your former employee Person X, who was introduced to me by a shared acquaintance, felt my skills are a good fit for your office and suggested I send my resume blah blah..."

Oct 5, 10 9:02 am  · 
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WAIT!

I screwed up my etiquette hierarchy (forgive me Miss Manners!): since you are of lower status than Person X in this relationship, it's not he who is introduced to you, it's the opposite. So it should be:

"Your former employee Person X, to whom I was introduced by a shared acquaintance, felt my skills are a good fit for your office and suggested I send my resume blah blah..."

I verified this mistake via Etiquette International. I love this stuff:

Business Introductions: In business, introductions are based on power and hierarchy. Simply, persons of lesser authority are introduced to persons of greater authority. Gender plays no role in business etiquette; nor does it affect the order of introductions.

For example, you would say, "Mr./Ms. Greater Authority, I would like to introduce Mr./Ms. Lesser Authority." However, the person holding the highest rank may not be Mr./Ms. Greater Authority. A client, for instance, always takes precedence over anyone in your organization, as does an elected official.

Oct 5, 10 9:08 am  · 
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You could also use colleague instead of acquaintance, which sounds more formal and perhaps more accurate.

Oct 5, 10 9:10 am  · 
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mjfw

That's beautiful... some of the phrases I had started to consider before writing this post would have definitely had my application package tossed out the window.

Thanks Donna.

Oct 5, 10 11:59 am  · 
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cakeyp

Make sure you at least have some contact with this person! Start an email conversation about the office, ask them a few questions... just in case someone brings them up in conversation, you have something to talk about! Know what they look like, too.
I once interviewed for a job when I was younger through a "friend of a friend," whom I had never met... disaster struck when we bumped into each other during the interview and had now idea who the other was! Whoops!

Oct 5, 10 2:05 pm  · 
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mjfw

Thanks cakeyp, we've started emailing back and forth now and I'm sure we'll be keeping in contact. Unfortunately I've never met him in person, but I am familiar with the work he's done, and the work he's done in the office I'm interested in applying too.

Thanks again

Oct 5, 10 5:35 pm  · 
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