I would get rid of Times New Roman. If you absolutely want to keep it, I would keep it as a body font only, and use a sans-serif for the titles (which can use a bit of variability, all three lines are the same size right now).

I like the chipboard background, but it makes the body text a bit hard to read. I would suggest either sizing it up (if it isn't already a 12pt) or changing the color. What would really pop this out is if you find a way to print this on chipboard. 1 ply is potentially thin enough to run through a printer (I've never tried).

The cover is too cheesy. Just do the logo (the logo explanation doesn't need an entire page) with your name, portfolio, etc...

Also Morocco is spelled wrong. I really like the orange that you use for the captions on some of the images, but you need to incorporated it into the rest of the portfolio (background chip/white/black/orange).

This one is definitely much stronger than the previous one you showed. Good work!

nice.

feels a bit short and hard to follow here and there, but it is interesting to look at. i don't find the cover cheezy. the explanation of the logo makes it less interesting to me, but thats probably just me. the cartoon is quite fun, while the projects you have done as professional give nice contrast to the whimsical pieces. It is much better than the standard picture book of unbuilt designs and pretentious texts that most of us carry around.

don't use real chipboard unless you really really see the need for it. it won't make the booklet any better. more content would be nice. which is a nice change. usually portfolios have too much and i am skipping pages not looking for more. nicely done.

I agree with jump the visual explanation of your logo is great, no need for the extra text. Although having the logo on every page at that size is a wee distracting, but I do like how it jumps about.

Sadly it is far too short, the content is far too rich visually and makes you want more. By far one of the better I've seen recently, added from someone left of architecture.

good luck

I think right now the most pressing issue you have is content. There seems to be a definite "lack of" everything? I'm not even quite sure what I just saw.

First it starts out as a comic book then out of nowhere it transitions to construction drawings. Do you see the problem here? It's like two worlds colliding together. Comic books are a great medium to convey a visual story. Maybe look at YES IS MORE by BIG and figure out how to combine your comic book style with the more realistic drawing stuff.


1. The logo explanation is really unnecessary but if you feel compelled to have it the please shrink it or something. It takes up a whole page! Mainly the reason why it's unnecessary is because the logical process you take in deriving your logo NEVER comes across anywhere else in your portfolio.

2. ALSO please remove the logo from other pages, it looks like a damn watermark. Maybe you're doing this for the online version, but PLEASE remember to remove it.

3. I'm not quite sure if I'm supposed to take the house project seriously. It comes across like Star Wars fan art. Especially from the fact that the person always seems to have a gas mask on.

4. Shrink the header down a lot. It's too large.

5. The Arena Howie Morenz project. I'm pretty sure you're bullshitting your role on this project. You said that you were the project manager from the beginning to the end and 4 images is all you have to show for it. I call bullshit.

6. Proof read. You have a ton of mistakes.

7. I think the best thing for you to do right now is just slap together all the work/art you've done into a quick portoflio-ish format. Upload it again, so peers can choose which project are good for you to use. This portfolio definitely needs work.

Thx all 4 the comments, it's very helpful, i will consider the comments...

1- Cover needs to be redone, please simplify and change font

2- Titles/headers/explanations font is too harsh and far too spaced out, find a better way to organize text w/ renderings in a way that is easy to navigate.

3- The pillar logo thing looks like a watermark, lose it

4- Lose the texture on the pages

Most of the issues are aesthetic, but as stated prior, there are many errors in grammar and spelling that need to be addressed.

Time New Roman is fine, just not as big. Loose the chipboard. No one likes fancy materials for a portfolio. it's all about content and i think your work has that. but it needs to be at least 3 times longer.

also loose the fancy cover. keep it all about the work