Ok, thank you for the smaller version, here a few comments:

- think about the order of the projects, and try dividing them into groups or giving them a sequence that is understandable (date of the work, size, location,...)

- treat your text in a similar manner in all the projects: fonts, typesizes, the order of information (name, location, ...) and if possible, situate it always in the same way - this will give your portfolio backbone.

- also, never use text as a design-element (like on page 5.)

- good luck!

(I'm sure RISD would be a great fit, considering your interest in details/joints and you admirable drafting skills.)

Excellent illustrations. I would put them all in one section though, instead of interlacing them.

I definitely agree with above.

I'd also like to add that I think you have wonderful graphics for almost all of your projects- but you may be over doing it. A lot of the time less is more. It's not the amount of images that makes and idea a success- it's the strength of the images. I would think about re-organizing your images to send a clear message of the project's intent.

For the most part the amount of text is good- until pg 17. No biggie, but def. re-format that. The text shape is taking away from the strength of the graphics.

One of your most successful pages is 24- even though you've got a lot of images, there is a clear hierarchical organization and it's not over whelming to look at.

don't write paragraphs of txt over your work- unclear and distasteful (pg. 21)

my two cents....

It's a lot of pages. Consider more editing. For me, the first on the chop list would be some of the work done as an employee at other firms.

There's strong work in there, but you put your weakest image on the cover. Those renderings are pretty harsh. If you can, perhaps putting them in the same B/W linework language as the rest of the portfolio might help make it a more cohesive package.

And as stated above, a minimal, consistent formatting for all projects is essential.

Good luck! That snake drawing is wild!

"- also, never use text as a design-element (like on page 5.)"

Helsinki- you are not the first person I have heard this from. Why do you recommend NOT using text as part of the graphic?

Hey, this is one of the best portfolios I've seen here on archinect, Fantastic drawings and I like the succession between art drawings and projects.
What I really liked, the American Repetitory project and material studies.
I'm not even concerned with your layouts, the content is really good and there seems to be a good variety as well, which seems to be kind of rare.
But yeah, you could improve a bit on the layouts.

bucku:
in my opinion, a portfolio should act as a neutral container - giving a frame and a sequence to the work presented - the texts that describe the projects are part of this "frame" not parts of the work - if someone wants to get a good grasp about a project, I can hardly imagine her/him appreciating expressive elements that interfere with the reading of the actual matter.

This concerns portfolios that are made for a number of receivers, not necessarily known to you, and who handle many portfolios: a structure that is accessible, legible and quickly understandable is a clear plus. Anything else is a hindrance to the reader/reviewer.

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When it comes to a more "art-book" approach to showing your work, then anything goes, and integrating project presentations and their descriptions (or anything else for that matter) is perfectly ok. But here the implication is that the portfolio is a project in its own right and (more importantly) that the reader has the time & enough motivation to get immersed in it.

Hi!

Thank you all for your excellent critique of my work...I will take your suggestions and begin reviewing and improving. I really appreciate everyone taking the time to provide such valuable insight. When it's your own work, it's sometimes hard to "see" it in another light...

The cover image needs work.

Recolorizing is definitely needed for that first image.. at the very least. Blue and orange, in those tones, do not create a pleasant image.


If I were you, I'd lead with hand drawings. A few of the ones in there show a definite skill in that dept...

the colors on the cover are wack dawg