I've completed a draft of my portfolio, and would really appreciate constructive criticism and advice from the archinect community on cleaning it up.Thanks so much.
- Throughout the portfolio there are drawings that you could scan, and model shots that would benefit from being rephotographed and/or having the backgrounds removed.
- Rethink the order of your projects - right now some of your strongest projects are in the middle, while your weakest one is at the end. Give your portfolio a more interesting finale.
- How would it look if you got rid of the purple background on some of your text blocks? White space can be your friend!
- Your projects are generally strong. There are some moments that would benefit from improved presentation, but you also have some other especially good moments.
Specific pages:
2-3
The image on the left is a great dramatic opener
6-7 Your renderings here aren't that great - especially not the two on the left. For the ones on the left, you could get rid of the grassy background and just given them a white background. Or (this is a better idea) give them context - an urban context would be interesting.
I feel like your first project is too drawn out. Try combining 4-5 and 6-7 into one spread.
8-9 The change in the 2020-2035 drawings isn't very legible. On the right your color choices are clunky.
16-17 Sections are clunky - could have more varied line weights.
19-21 Have the houseboat project start on its own spread. You could get rid of some of the views and sections on the last page.
i agree with the poster above about getting rid of the purplish/blueish boxes that your text sits in. I dont really think its helping having that color tone around.
@snail: just one question. i put the houseboat project last because it wasn't a studio project, but something i worked on in an office. so i wasn't sure if it would really fit anywhere else. i didn't really think it would go well in the middle...suggestions?
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portfolio critique
I've completed a draft of my portfolio, and would really appreciate constructive criticism and advice from the archinect community on cleaning it up.Thanks so much.
http://issuu.com/frangipani13/docs/portfolio
I really really thought the talk scape was interesting. The bike camp looks intriguing as well.
General comments:
- Throughout the portfolio there are drawings that you could scan, and model shots that would benefit from being rephotographed and/or having the backgrounds removed.
- Rethink the order of your projects - right now some of your strongest projects are in the middle, while your weakest one is at the end. Give your portfolio a more interesting finale.
- How would it look if you got rid of the purple background on some of your text blocks? White space can be your friend!
- Your projects are generally strong. There are some moments that would benefit from improved presentation, but you also have some other especially good moments.
Specific pages:
2-3
The image on the left is a great dramatic opener
6-7 Your renderings here aren't that great - especially not the two on the left. For the ones on the left, you could get rid of the grassy background and just given them a white background. Or (this is a better idea) give them context - an urban context would be interesting.
I feel like your first project is too drawn out. Try combining 4-5 and 6-7 into one spread.
8-9 The change in the 2020-2035 drawings isn't very legible. On the right your color choices are clunky.
16-17 Sections are clunky - could have more varied line weights.
19-21 Have the houseboat project start on its own spread. You could get rid of some of the views and sections on the last page.
@snail: thank you for those detailed/insightful comments! i will work on all those things.
@aaron: thanks for the encouragement!
i agree with the poster above about getting rid of the purplish/blueish boxes that your text sits in. I dont really think its helping having that color tone around.
@snail: just one question. i put the houseboat project last because it wasn't a studio project, but something i worked on in an office. so i wasn't sure if it would really fit anywhere else. i didn't really think it would go well in the middle...suggestions?
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