Dear all

I am applying in the graduate school and here's the statement of purpose. I am open to any comments that will tend to improve this statement of purpose

-As a student of architecture during under graduation, I had developed an interest in the building typology. I started understanding how architecture can change the life style and increase the standard of living. While the study trip during the college course, I felt the importance of light and shadow in a building along with the effect of climate on the building. Undergraduate studies taught me the fundamentals of architecture and further as I proceeded my knowledge broadened and developed skills in the design.
Over the past two years from the time I am working with M/s XYZ, I have realized that Architecture and urbanism are interrelated to each other. By examining architecture and urbanism as a whole, we can create a better urban fabric. Urban development relies on a thoughtful design, environmental and societal systems. I will have a better understanding of the resilient, livable neighborhood, cities and region, their planning with the natural environment in MIT School of Architecture and Planning. With the help of faculties, I will learn the new methodologies, design techniques and innovative methods.
In this growing trend one has to learn from the problems faced in an unplanned cities/ neighborhoods, rectify them or think about them while redesigning and to make sure that the same mistakes doesn’t repeat. Born in the capital city of Bihar, Patna, I have experienced many such problems such as traffic congestion, encroachments. I have travelled extensively throughout India and witnessed the same issues in places such as Bhopal, Indore, Kolkata, Mumbai. The famous ‘dharavi’ Slums in city of Mumbai is a result of the rapid urbanization, planning recourses and strategies are needed to address the problem of slum development.
In the early semesters of my undergraduate studies, we had a paper on physical planning. We went to survey the site in Horapet Road, I was stunned to see the reaction of the people. The local residents confused us with the local authorities and came out on the road, crying out their problems. The basic needs such as clean drinking water, proper sewage lines not given to them. 90 percent of the people in that area were below poverty line and had to survive in such conditions daily. Almost 43 percent of children remained ill due to water borne diseases caused due to improper water disposal systems. 
I had been to the dharavi slums once during my early visits to Mumbai in 2011, I was taken aback by the scenario there, the people are not staying on their own land. The potters brick kilns sent huge black flames which polluted the air and as a result the patients conditions became worse in adjacent hospital. I saw children playing in the sewage waste. Next to the open sewers are water pipes which can crack anytime and take in the sewage. A proper thought out planning can sort out these problems and save the infants and adults from getting prone to fatal diseases.
As a designer then, I decided that I had to do a post graduation course in city planning to understand and solve such pressing issues. Through this course I will built the equitable models for development that improve the built forms and the natural environment,
My goal is to design spaces in such a way that it sustain and enhance the quality of living. As a planner my aim will be to learn from the mistakes made in the past centuries improve the built forms and promote the cultural stability through the problem – solving technique. By earning a master’s degree from XYZ I will be one step closer in achieving my goals.
This university will help me develop new techniques to design and develop a future buildings that are adaptive with rooted infrastructures. I will work hard with the faculties of XYZ, and turn out to be the best graduate student in the university.
I would like to extend my gratitude to the admission committee to take out some time and consider my application.