Hey, given your previous conversation, I know where you'll be sending this too so I'll focus my comments on that.

First impressions... the images are way too desaturated.  Everything looks like it got washed with the same grey-brown cloth.  It's muddy and does not make the imagery particularly appealing.  You also need to redo the some of the images since I can tell you used a feather % when you trimmed in PS.  Brighter monitors will pick-out editing mistakes more easily.

Anyways, as for content, you need to put more emphasis on the progress work and dirty napkin sketches.  This is the best way to show how you think and resolve design problems.  Anyone can press the render button and throw-up shiny images.  You need to show more progress and final designs.

Also important... those technical drawings in the first project are not in scale.  The plan is larger than the section/elevations (you have 1:100 and 1:200 scales).  Both scales are too small to show anything meaningful.  Better to draw these at a scale that will fit the folio layout and align them.  Remember, assembling the portfolio is a design exercise.  Reviewers will notice when things are just thrown on a page without much thought.  This includes image alignment, text/font placement and what images get preferential treatment.

Cheers.

I agree with NS on the progress drawings.  I would advise also taking a look at your typeface choice and placement.  The typeface is very generic and the text placement is all over the page. The title of the project is in the same place but separated from the rest of the text.  I also suggest adding a two to three sentences max explaining what the project is.  Keep it brief!  The portfolio is a design project.  Consider reviewing a few layouts you can use throughout instead of making each spread unique.

You have a table of contents, but no pages have pages numbers.  Honestly this portfolio is short enough that you probably don't need a TOC.  I'm not sure what the CN tower has to do with your work.  I'd remove it.  You probably also don't need a 'personal details' page if you are also submitting a CV. It takes up potential space that could be used for those napkin sketches NS recommended.

I'm going to also agree with NS's and thatsthat's comments. 

I'm also going to reinforce the need for process sketches.  I've been doing this for just over 15 years so my portfolio consists of all built work however  I have an entire section of my portfolio for just process sketches.  Potential employers really do like to see that stuff.  As other have said it shows how you think.   

Thanks folks, my action list is:

Images, I went OTT with the desaturation, will reset back to zero and rework the photoshop stuff

Layout, making more white space and having less per spread.

Need to find my sketchbook from my first degree, that's got a large selection of sketches, if not, I'll make some new napkins to insert!

Scale of technical drawings, thank you, they were scaled for a different document, will amend those.

Fine art, should I include? got a few watercolours that may be suitable.

https://issuu.com/home/published/portfolio-ca-002

Further progress, I'm done for the night, its 2250 here.

https://issuu.com/glossop.desi...

Current version above. Still doesn't feel there.

I used this, albeit retitled for another application that required other drawings and interests/hobbies - the last page of photos made up a section of these and was combined with water colours.

I don't think any other institution will require the photography so I can probably remove.

You're image on spread 10-11 is killing me. Take out the ceiling lights and range hood at the very least.