not a bad first attempt. A lot better than some recent ones posted from people who studied (finished) an architectural degree. 

It’s a little too wordy for me, I never read all the text when I reviewed applications. You made a good choice in fonts. 

It’s simple, but well organized. I would probably have images with a black background on a black sheet, but that’s very trivial. 

Out of curiosity, why those schools? There all over the place in terms of ideology. RPI no Syracuse/GSAPP, UT no Rice. I would honestly say based off what I’ve seen you have a shot at some of the usual schools listed here. More than recent people asking for a critique. Just a thought 

First of all, not bad for the first attempt. 

Secondly, there are several "styles" of March1 tracks nationwide, you need to know what you want first, then make revision accordingly. For instance, UPENN/Sci-Arc(futurism+parametric+virtuosity school) vs UTAustin/Uwashington ( pragmatical) vs RISD (artistic). There are schools in between, but do some work on digging into their website and see student work and studios introduction or annual publications, to understand what they did, and what you want.

Saying this because, in terms of the contents, I can see is similar methodology of design process and conceptual composition articulated by physical or digital model. If you have renderings, diagrams/mappings/ progressive drawings/collages even b/w linework plan or axometrics, put them all on page, then decide what you want what you don't. They are just tools to sell your design and capability, if you don't have any yet, think about it and make(or fake) it out.

Here is a similar (style only, this is definitely a work sample so different criteria from academic application)example on issuu: https://issuu.com/leafinfall/d...

Text can be an element of layout, but too many text will not be read at all, because reviewers normally only have 1-2 mins, 5 mins max for one applicant, when sometime argument occurs among reviews. If you refer a story-telling portfolio, tell stories by your images.

Thirdly, if you have time, explore some new little design/projects which are well related with your current major, showing your creativity and potential in design. You must know Rem and Zaha even Ando they were not in architecture school at first but all success because of introducing their knowledge of other area to push architecture forward. So show your "psychological" personality and creativity in your portfolio. Don't be afraid, because their are thousands of applicants from tons of unrelated fields.

Finally, about schools. As I said above, do more research on schools, read recent years DI rank (full version, there are free ones online). Add some for your list here: GSAPP, UPenn, UCS/SCI-ARC/UCLA, , WUSTL, Syracuse, (even RICE, MIT, Cornell, UCBerkeley, GSD(come on! everyone tried once)

Last tips, but IMPORTANT: don't put your ID/photo whatever in your portfolio, never, never. Unprofessional and it may cause some pressure of political correct unconsciously. When I was in the reviewing team with professors/reviewers back in school, we reviewed the portfolio at first without knowing the gentle, then cv/resume may figure the gentle from name but we do not expect any photo showing in your portfolio, especially at every beginning.

I thought it was pretty cool.  A lot of architects would be interested in quitting to join a start-up like you.

It is interesting to note that you are a psychology graduate but applying for a position in Master in Architecture . Do the universities that You apply for consider you are as an eligible prospective student?